Music in Fourteen Lines

Ebbing cultural constructions
A ball of red clay turning in circles
Valerie sitting down at the piano, inside me something focuses
Outside in the warmth, in the dark lit stage music spills out over me
You are ever so tangible
I am a hot summer night
Mad self, mad house, mad street
Hot bodies cold beer, the middle of the afternoon
This moment of clarity: floating floating floating
The drummer telling my skin, my feet to move move move
Heat from my body jumping
hot hot hot
All of this matters because we make it matter we tell ourselves it matters
What for
What for
All of this matters because we make it matter we tell ourselves it matters
hot hot hot
The heat from my body jumping
The drummer telling my skin, my feet to move move move
In this moment of clarity: floating floating floating
Hot bodies cold beer, the middle of the afternoon
Mad self, mad house, mad street
I am a hot summer night
You are ever so tangible
Outside in the warmth, in the dark lit stage music spills out over me
Valerie sitting down at the piano, inside me something focuses
A ball of red clay turning in circles
Ebbing cultural construction
Ebbing cultural constructions
Mad self, mad house, mad street
All of this matters because we make it matter we tell ourselves it matters
What for
I am a hot summer night
Valerie sitting down at the piano, inside me something focuses
Outside in the warmth, in the dark lit stage music spills out over me
The drummer in the band telling my skin, my feet to move move move
Heat from my body jumping
Hot bodies cold beer, the middle of the afternoon
hot hot hot
A ball of red clay turning in circles
You are ever so tangible
In this moment of clarity: floating floating floating
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6 Responses to Music in Fourteen Lines

  1. Rain, Rain says:

    I think this could become something astonishing if you recorded it, and multitracked it: start with the sparse solitary lines, then layer them together, and togetherer… and togetherest! I’d listen to that.

  2. I like that idea! Thank you… I’ll have to figure out how to do that 😉 Do you know how?

  3. Rain, Rain says:

    You might be able to make do with a run-of-the-mill video-editing program, if it supports multi-track audio — record and edit to video, then strip out the picture when you’re done — but I’d recommend a freeware audio recording/editing program called Audacity. Audacity is track-based and reasonably easy to learn – depending on your familiarity with editing, it might take you a few minutes or a couple of hours to work out the interface and figure out how to make it record. (I’m sure there are tutorials all around the internet, but I mostly just hack away at it until I figure things out.) Just about any built-in computer mic these days should be fine for recording voice. Record each line individually, create a bunch of audio tracks, then start cutting and pasting the clips onto the tracks till you get to where you’re going. To keep things in order, make a chart, or use post-it notes, or just ear-ball it. (I’d probably do the latter.)

    A bunch of poets have written poems for two voices (something I’ve been meaning to try for a while but haven’t gotten around to), and watching down videos of some of those might give you ideas for how to approach it. Those sorts of poems tend to be tightly-scripted, though; for yours, I hear jazz!

  4. Rain, Rain says:

    Good luck! If you do this, please post an update comment here? I think I’ve figured out how to get WordPress to notify me … and I’d love to hear what you make of it.

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